Sunday, March 24, 2013

Sunday Writing Post

Time for Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday! Take the time to check out the links, it's a great opportunity to read the work of some talented writers.

DWARFED is a YA manuscript featuring 16 year old Grace, who temporarily finds herself living on a working hog farm in Michigan where she feels . Grace has a big heart and a stubborn nature. She also has a genetic condition called achondroplasi a dwarfisam.



I shield my eyes from the brutal glare of the sun, and study the sparkling water. There’s no sign of my duck.
A flash of movement grabs my attention, and I watch a black feather cartwheel into the gelatinous debris. Trepidation curls my toes and bile fills my throat.  The grounds sprinkled with a liberal layer of black feathers. Adelaide’s feathers. 
I can’t believe I didn’t see them sooner.
Adelaide molts but she’s never lost this much of her plumage at one time.  I pick up a feather. Blood transfers from the quill to my fingertips.

25 comments:

  1. OH NO! To be expected in life on a farm I imagine. I liked the imagery. I'll be back next week. I've been following along on this one.

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  2. Oh Nooo! Adelaide!

    You know, this is a good dose of reality. Farm life is tough. It's hard to have a soft heart and live in a place where animals living and dying is part of the program.

    Good eight, Jess. Nice, rich details.

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  3. Oh no! (Looks like that's everyone's reaction!) Great job on the description and details. I hope it's not as bad as it looks--and I really could see it. Maybe just an injury? Crossing my fingers until next Sunday.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  4. I gasped when I read about all the feathers! I thought, *darn* is Jess going to tease us with introducing Adelaide only to snuff her out before we even get to meet her?! But then I realized, life with animals is like that, and this isn't the kind of story to sugar-coat life.

    But maybe Adelaide wins a reprieve! I still hope to meet her :D :D

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  5. Oh no! Poor Adelaide! Great descriptive passage, Jess.

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  6. I don't think I've ever been this attached to a duck! Oh no...I fear next week's post but will certainly be back to check on poor Adelaide! My guts are in a knot.

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  7. Oh no! I hope it's not anything horrible. Made a lump form in my throat. But I want to find out. Really nice writing and very vivid. :-)

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  8. Uh oh, I'm on edge now. I HOPE the duck is ok but seems doubtful. I can;t wait for next week! Terrific snippet!

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  9. Oh no, poor Adelaide! It doesn't seem possible, but I hope she somehow survived! Great snippet! :)

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  10. Poor Adelaide! Beautiful description, though. I love the build up to her picking up the bloody feather. Very tense and emotional.

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  11. Oh no-- blood. This cannot be good. So emotional- I got chills.

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  12. Wild predator? I've lost ducks to owls and (wild) ferrets. They were never pets, though.

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  13. Blood? That says it all! Wonder what attacked the duck? Good snippet.

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  14. I'm sad over this. Really good job conveying emotion and sympathy for this duck.

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  15. You're going to make me cry! No, not the duck. You pulled at my heart strings in just this little snippet. Well done.

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  16. No! What happened? A fight? Is she maybe ok and just missing a lot of feathers? I'll be back next week for answers and you better post them, young lady! ;)

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  17. Oh no!!! You can't stop there! Oh, geez, you're making me cry. Seriously. Oh, tell me her poor duck is okay...

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  18. I think Adelaide is one dead duck. Spooky snippet, Jess. :)

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  19. Sounds bleak for the one with the beak and webbed feet.
    Emotional snippet, well done.

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  20. Oh, no. Poor Adelaide. I hope the poor duck is all right. Not seriously injured.

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  21. I love animals and your photos. Animals have been my teachers for quite a few years. Looking forward to connecting. Found you through the 2013 A-Z Blog Challenge. As a participant in this challenge I also nominate you for the Liebster Award, find out more about your nomination at http://www.weblessyourheart.com/2013/03/31/liebster-award-i-accept/. I am looking forward to connecting with you as we both participate in the challenge this year. Cheryl

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  22. Very moving! Oh no - I feel like such a wimp when it comes to animals. I hope Adeleide is OK.

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