Saturday, March 7, 2015

WeWriWa Snippet from The Chocolate House - All for Love - Anthology: "Masqueraders" 3/8/15

Last fall I was able to take part in an opportunity to participate in creating content for a historical anthology. Just a few days, the results of my labor went public in a book titled
The Chocolate House - All for Love - Anthology: "Masqueraders". My contribution is a short story titled A Pig in a Poke which is where today's snippet comes from. The snippet is the first 8 lines from my story. Please be sure that you take a little time to check out the list of brilliant writers taking place in this weeks Weekend Writers Blog Hop. You'll be amazed by the number of talented authors you'll encounter.



Simon Harper rubbed his neck and scanned the piece of paper one more time. He hoped the words had changed since the previous reading.  Luck wasn’t on his side. The blasted message remained the same. 



Simon,

Meet me at Masqueraders Chocolate House at 1:00 pm: no excuses

Sincerely,

Sebastian



Simon glanced at the tidy stack of ledgers piled on one side of his desk and heaved a sigh. He would far rather sort through the complicated tangle of numbers left by the previous proprietor than meet with his older brother.



The Chocolate House - All for Love - Anthology: "Masqueraders" is only $0.99 via Amazon and the proceeds are going to the Great Ormond Street Hospital for Children, London.

24 comments:

  1. Terrific beginning. I'm really curious to know why he doesn't want to meet his brother and what the note means.

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  2. Wow, Jess, this is a great opening! A lot of questions to draw us further into the story. I can see improvement in your writing just in the year or so I've known you. And you sure can pick cliffhangers! :-D

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    1. Thanks Marcia. You're so sweet! I do have to confess that the cliffhanger was a happy accident.

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  3. Wonder what his brother is like?

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    1. :) I'm editing currently editing the manuscript where Sebastian is the main character. He's ... challenging.

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  4. secrets to start the book. perfect idea. Now I'm curious what his brother wants

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  5. Great start. And lol - rubbing my neck and re-reading a message doesn't work for me either.
    Tweeted.

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    1. Thank you Victoria! I've tried the trick with bills a few times and have yet to generate the desired result. Still, I keep hoping.

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  6. Intriguing opening lines, Jess! :-) Nicely done :-) I didn't know about this book. I'll have to check it out. :-)

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    1. It just released on Thurs, and prior to that everyone involved was staying pretty quiet. Now that the silence has broken, I suspect you'll get sick of hearing about it.

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  7. You begin with a cliffhanger and that's a good thing. Terrific eight.

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  8. Great beginning! Wonder why he doesn't want to meet his brother, especially since chocolate might be involved. He can't be all bad!

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  9. Ah, family... sometimes they drive you crazy. I'm guessing he and his brother have some serious issues.

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  10. You've set this up really well. There's a lot of information in the opening, and yet so many details the reader wants to discover as she reads further.

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  11. Intriguing set up and the word chocolate in the title - this is gonna be good!

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  12. What a wonderful idea for such a good cause! Enjoyed the snippet and I'm thoroughly hooked on the story already :-)

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  13. Older brothers can be such a pain! Great snippet, Jess. I'm hoping Simon at least gets some chocolate out of this!

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  14. Wonder what is going on to cause such reluctance? Terrific description of the scene, you made it come alive.

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