Friday, May 4, 2012

May 4th Friday Fictioneers: You’re Insane

I know what I wanted this weeks Friday Fictioneer piece to read like, but no matter how much I begged, wept, and threatened, the words simply refused to do my bidding. Reminds me of a few horses I know. This is the 104 words I settled on.
                “You’re insane.” Jason tugs on the brim of his battered John Deere ballcap. He grimaces at the old wine rack and the few cob-web coated bottles of wine it holds. “No one in their right mind would spend any more time in here than absolutely necessary.”

                “Once it’s fixed up, it will be the perfect place to write, though it’s a bit cramped.” Electricity races the length of my arm and my stomach flips nervously as I tap my fingers against the mildewey brick wall that’s been calling to me since I entered the room.

“I need to see what’s behind this wall.”
               
This week's Friday Fictioneer prompt was originally posted on Madison Wood's blog. 

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Friday Fictioneer guidelines have been posted here.

27 comments:

  1. Dear Jess,

    A good story with three edits needed in the second paragraph. Reminds me of the house in question, though. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    P.S. Thanks for the comments on mine.

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-nerve/

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    1. Whoa, you're not kidding. Thanks for pointing those out :) Who knows how long it would have been before I caught them.

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  2. Who, what or inspiration lies behind the wall - nicely done and well related back to what we're all doing, writing. :-)

    http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-a-wall-to-keep-a-secret/

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    1. Thanks for stopping by and commenting :)

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  3. Finely written with a mystery at the end that needs solving. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/fridayfictioneers-lost-without-you/

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    1. Your so sweet. Thanks for taking the time to read my short story. It's appreciated.

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  4. Ah, ha--a writer seeking solitude for their writing. We'll go to great lengths for that, won't we? Nicely done.

    Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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    1. Solitude, a little extra time, a more cooperative muse. All things on my wish list. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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  5. And what lurkes behind the brick?

    Here's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/

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    1. Based on the way my brain's been working this week, nothing good.

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  6. Very intriguing. A good taster for something more.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/dysfunctional-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

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    1. Thanks for stopping by. I loved your dysfunctional family story.

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  7. Oooh, sounds like a good start to a murder mystery. Nicely done, Jess! :)

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  8. That is a very creepy wall. I agree.

    Here's mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-the-gig/

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  9. I would be exactly the same! Here's mine http://createrealitylivelife.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/friday-flash-fiction/

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  10. You got the compulsion down exactly. The need for him to be there and writing, like an obsession. I like that you start before he digs into the wall. You can literally take this story anywhere from here and I KNOW it will be good. Great moment, I love this share. Here's mine: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/fixer-upper-friday-flash-fiction.html

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  11. And that was clever! We all are looking for the perfect place to write - the shed in the garden, the garret, that dilapidated building with the mysterious brick wall hiding the secret room?
    Very good take on the prompt!
    Yours, Laura at
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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    1. That's the truth. Thanks for taking the time to stop and read my short story :)

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  12. That is a writer's mind alright! Well done.

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  13. Yes, very good. The (for me) eternal search for a place to write. Laptops have only made it worse – or irrelevant. Now I move around the house to any place that's quiet, and if it's not, I put headphones on. Is this the new, overcrowded world? But your piece shows the very private attachment we gete to certain places. Oh, by the way, I think I would have used "mildewed" instead of "mildewey" only because it doesn't stick out as much; very small point.

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