Sunday, December 2, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday 12/2/12



So, did everyone make it through NaNoWriMo? I did, though I’m not looking forward to the massive amount of editing I foresee in my future.

Now back to this week’s SSS post. I picked up where I left off a few weeks ago. If you’re new to my blog you can catch up by visiting this post right here. You should also check out the official Six Sentence Sunday list. There’s several very talented writers participating this week. You’ll enjoy reading their contributions.

Etna lumbers over to the nursery crate, and peers down at the piglet, who stares up at her. My nails dig little crescent shaped gouges into my palms. There’s nothing I won’t do to help it, even going toe to toe with my aunt.
She adjusts her eye patch and her heads swivels to face me. I should meet her eye, I want to, but no matter how hard I try, I can’t, the best I can do is staring at a small tear in her jacket. She shuffles closer and my knees shake.


Thank you for taking the time to read my little snippet. Any and all comments and criticisms are appreciated.


26 comments:

  1. I can certainly feel the tension, Jess! Great 6!

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  2. Wonderfully descriptive as always!

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  3. Oh, Jess! This is a wonderful passage--so full of all sorts of emotions. Well done!

    And congrats on finishing NaNo. I hear you on the editing. My WIP this year is...Let's just say I'm taking a vacation of few days so I have the energy to face the steaming pile of...stuff. ;)

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    1. That's exactly how I feel about my Nano right now. I can see glimmers of goodness in it, but man, bringing them to the surface is going to take some time and effort.

      Congrats on finishing.

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  4. Ah so sweet, and honest! great six!

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  5. What fun! I think a lot of people, when they were kids, had at least one relative who made them shake in their shoes. My father's father was like that. He never did anything to anybody, but being quite tall and always have a really stern expression, we never knew what he *might* do!

    Great snippet here, as usual. I love that Grace is gearing herself up to meet whatever challenge Aunt Etna tosses at her. Good stuff.

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    1. You're absolutely correct. It's funny how now that I'm an adult I can't figure out why some people terrified me so much during my childhood.

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  6. Good evocation of tension. I've just followed you, BTW.

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  7. Lots of detail in this snippet. Well done! Congrats on making it through NaNoWriMo!!

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  8. Excellent, Jess. Your words teem with imagery. I could see the little crescents, even feel them. And Grace is so believable, so relatable. Great job. I like that Grace is taking the runt! Great six :-)

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  9. Her aunt sounds formidable! Great six!

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  10. Wow great description of her reaction to her aunt! You showed it instead of just telling us, good job!

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  11. Oh, I hope she's able to keep that piglet. Such a cute pic, too. :)

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  12. I foresee some major character growth in Grace's future. Good stuff, Jess!

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  13. I love the contrasting emotions she's going through. And going toe to toe with a relative? Now, that's eye-catching. Well done, and glad you made through NaNoWriMo. I'd do it, except I'm the type of writer who has to craft the perfect first draft - don't think I could make the deadline.

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    1. I know exactly what you mean. The entire time I'm trying to blast out the first draft I keep thinking about what I have to correct. When I finally get around to rewriting it, my perfectionist self will come out.

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  14. Love love love, this is really good Jess. And hats off to you for finishing NaNoWriMo with 74k, leaving me behind in the dust with 56k. Very impressive! :)

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    1. You finished and that's all that matters :) and don't be to impressed, I've read some of the pages and I wrote, and well, there's alot of work to be done.

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    2. Same here. I'm glad we made it. :)

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  15. I like her frustration and anguish. Great job as always, Jess!
    Ryan

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  16. Sounds like this woman is quite a terror. Good six, Jess. :)

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  17. Fascinated by this relationship with Etna. Excellent teaser.

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