Sunday, February 10, 2013

Sunday's Writing Snippet for #WeWriWa

This snippet from my YA manuscript picks up where last weeks concluded. To read the excellent snippets the talented writers participating in today's writing event you can check out the Weekend Writing Warriors list or the FaceBook group .

I'm not sure how many snippets I'll be able to read. I'm traveling, but I'll try to get to as many as I can.




         “Here,” Luke hands her to me. I cuddle her against my chest and coo meaningless words. She closes her eyes and presses her thin body against my sternum and sighs. 

            Luke steps out of the room for a second before reappearing with a small ladder. “The room is small. Hopefully that and the fact it’s still fairly warm outside will be enough to keep her warm, but I figured I’d hang this heat lamp just in case. It could get cool at night and she doesn’t have any littermates to snuggle with.

            Luke climbs to the top of the ladder and uses duct tape to attach the first of the lights to the ceiling.



31 comments:

  1. Oh, I want to cuddle her too. Such a sweet scene and love the pic above. :)

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  2. Loyal fan of duct tape, here!
    You can fix anything with it, even a broken heart!

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  3. Aw, lovely description and wonderful picture!

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  4. So caring, you 'draw' a lovely pic. the photo's cute too

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  5. Very heartwarming and makes me want to cuddle her too. Love the photo, as well. :-)

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  6. Glad that Luke is being so concerned and helpful now.

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  7. Aww sweet...the sentences and the picture.

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  8. Such a sweet scene! Looking forward to reading more.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  9. Adorable! And they work well together, don't they?

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  10. Looks to me like Luke is almost as invested in this piglet as Grace. Or maybe it's Grace he's invested in :) Wonderful snippet.

    (I think you lost an ending quote mark)

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  11. That's such a cute scene and picture! Is that a Flemish Giant, or just a normal-sized rabbit who looks huge next to the runt pig?

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  12. Luke is so lovely! And the description of the pig snuggling was adorable. Lovely few sentences.

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  13. Aww that is such a wonderful visual. I loved it. Great job. :-) That piglet is so darn cute. :-)

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  14. Luke is so practical, which is endearing. Loved the photo - awwww...another excellent excerpt!

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  15. Super snippet. warmth and love - Grace can't cuddlle the piglet all night.

    I don't normally 'do' cute, but I have to admit that that picture is very sweet.

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  16. I love the affection and warmth of the scene. Great snippet.

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  17. I like that Luke cares enough for her to make an effort for the piglet, too. Good snippet, Jess. :)

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  18. Nothing like caring for a baby animal to endear a guy to us! Great snippet!

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  19. I like Luke. I've said that before, huh? He's a hunk. :-) lol

    An observation: when I read the word "sternum" it stopped my reading flow. No one else noticed, though, so it's probably just my own writerly weirdness.

    Good 8, Jess. :-)

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  20. Luke is such a great guy. I like him. And I agree, that picture is so sweet. A very sweet scene.

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  21. An adorable scene you have here. And Luke seems like a decent, likeable character.

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  22. Love it - Luke sounds like a sweetheart.

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  23. Good old duct tape! They used to call it rocket tape around here, because there were times is was used to hold rocket components together. And I love your foster mother picture.

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  24. Let me guess, little piglet isn't going to sleep alone? :-) I'm going to second what Teresa wrote--I also stopped on sternum and I'm pretty comfortable with anatomy (I'm a bio teacher). Partly, I just don't think of the sternum as a soft, warm, cuddly spot.

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    1. Oh, and I loved the snippet, too. I love her mothering, heart-melting reaction. And that picture is just so gosh-darn cute!

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  25. Cute scene and almost as cute a photo.

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  26. Awww, this is a sweet and cute scene.

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  27. I know that little contented sigh. It's been so long since I've snuggled a piglet. Sweet eight, and adorable picture!

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  28. aww this is so sweet and heartwarming xx lovely!

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  29. OMG that is THE most precious picture! And the writing ... I can tell you've lived this. You don't miss a single detail. This is such a wonderful story, Jess!

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