I hope everyone survived the blast of miserable weather last week. I got lucky. Everything went south of me and my little corner of Michigan was cold, but sunny.
I'm posting another snippet from my soon to be released, YA WWII, rural romance novella, Rendezvous with Destiny. It's a story about friendship, changes, and secrets.
Don't forget to check out the authors who are participating in this week's WeWriWa blog hop! You'll be glad you did. It's a talented and diverse bunch!
I hope my snippet is 8 sentences. The first few times I counted, I got a funny number, which I'm hoping was nothing more than a temporary brain snafu!
Rosika
bit her lip and looked across the truck’s hood at Felicia who was pressed so
tightly against Theo’s side, a mosquito caught between their bodies would
suffocate. Her arms were wrapped around his neck and he seemed engrossed by
whatever she was whispering in his ear.
They
looked good together.
The
realization caused something sharp and unfamiliar jolted through Rosika. A
hollow sensation filled her stomach. Her fingers curled into fists, her nails
digging into her palms. A strange urge to rip off her shoe and drive the heel
through someone’s eye swept over her.
She
just needed to decide whose eye to exact revenge upon first.
I'm currently giving away three paperback copies of Rendezvous with Destiny via GoodReads. Feel free to sign up!
So many things about this work, Jess. I love this: "A strange urge to rip off her shoe and drive the heel through someone’s eye swept over her. "
ReplyDeleteA little typo here: The realization caused something sharp and unfamiliar jolted through Rosika. Erase "jolted" and insert "to jolt".
I counted twice. I got 8 sentences. ;-)
Oh that green-eyed monster! Great job, love it.
ReplyDeletenothing like the crazy thoughts one has when jealousy has its way. LOL. I love her contemplating which eye as if her craziness is valid. (which at the time sometimes feels true. LOL)
ReplyDeleteHer movements conveyed her anger well - so well done with that! Intriguing snippet!
ReplyDeleteLove, love, love this snippet. I'm in the scene feeling her jolt of pain. We've all been there when jealousy rears its ugly head and you've captured it.
ReplyDeleteMany good times spent in Michigan in my earlier life when we lived in Chicago.
Very believable, visceral response. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet! Interested in this story because of WWII aspects :)
ReplyDeletePoor Rosika! I loved the line about the mosquito :-) Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteGreat line with the mosquito. I wonder whose eye is going to get it.
ReplyDeleteVery good eight, Jess!