Anyway, I'm posting from a short story I wrote called Pig in a Poke, which was published in The
“Miss Malleson!” Brice drew himself to his
full height and puffed out his chest, the movement reminded Letty of the small
rooster she owned. “I’ve done no such thing. The butchers paid market value for
your hogs. I took my commission. The amount listed on the banknote is your
grandfather’s share.”
Letty took a deep breath, held it while
she silently counted to three, and released it in one long whoosh. “I was
assured that, provided they were in good shape after being driven here, the
compensation I’d receive for my hogs would be substantial.”
Haha! I love the visual of the small rooster. We had bantams when I was growing up. I pictured him poking out his chest and crowing at her. lol Good snippet, Jess.
ReplyDeleteExcellent visuals, Jess!
ReplyDelete"I took my commission"- hmm!
Excellent visuals, Jess!
ReplyDelete"I took my commission"- hmm!
I'm guessing the commission had something to do with the less than substantial sum she's getting. Love the rooster analogy!
ReplyDeleteMissed you, Jess. Charming story. His commission ,in deed!
ReplyDeleteInteresting conversation. I like that she stands up for herself and what's right. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteFun snippet. I predict his commission is about to be recalculated.
ReplyDeleteI find myself believing he didn't cheat her, rooster posing aside. I wonder what went wrong, or if his commission is unfair, after all.
ReplyDeleteLove the comparison to a rooster. The image informed everything he spoke to her with an aura of puffed up flummery and self-importance.
ReplyDeleteLOL! What a fun excerpt! Sure glad to see you posting again, and will keep my fingers crossed that you can post all month!
ReplyDeleteI'm curious whether the commission is correct or not. You've given Brice just enough credibility that even though he's puffed up, I'm not sure he's lying. Great voice for this.
ReplyDeleteOoh, two confident, determined characters. I like that in a story.
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