Sunday, September 30, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday

If I did not respond to a comment you left regarding last weeks SSS post, or failed to visit your blog, I apologize. Not only did my week become uber busy, (both with stable duties, and copywriting), but I also developed the head cold that's been going around, and found spending any more time than absolutely necessary to be torturous. This week I should be able to make the rounds.

Thanks for all of your wonderful comments last week. This week's snippet picks up where last week's left off.
             I study his face. I’m not going to like what he’s about to say.
            “You can see for yourself, your piglet’s not doing well.”
            It takes all of my will power to shuffle my feet, and inch towards the crate. It’s barely been twelve hours since I saw her, how bad can she possibly be?
            I cross my arms over my stomach, and peer into the nursery crate at the litter of piglets. 

Check out the horde of amazing writers participating in this week's SSS. Links to their blogs can be found right here.

 

25 comments:

  1. Hi Jess-this makes me choke up a bit. It can't be good. I think you did an awesome job with Grace's PoV. That's exactly how I imagine it to be like, the moment before you know..
    Dang, I was hoping for a resolve! :)

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    1. Thanks. I hadn't read this section in awhile, and was pleasantly surprised. It's better than I remembered.

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  2. Oh, no! Don't let the piglet die, that breaks my heart. (Although, we all know, as writers, it's sometimes necessary to break the readers' hearts). Great six!!

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  3. OH! I can't remember if I said this last week, but I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE, LOVE, LOVE that new picture on your banner. What a cutie-pie.

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    1. Thanks. She was just as sweet as she was cute.

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  4. Oh, I'm so worried for her and that piglet. Great six! :)

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  5. Hmmm, this could go several ways. Either the piglet is weaker, or it's fine and he was teasing, or it's VERY sick. Neither of the final options make him a very nice person. Fingers crossed for next week. Very well done six.

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  6. Geez Louise, what a place to stop! :D I wonder too if he's teasing, since he was so blunt, but I have to wait a week. Awesome job on keeping the tension up.

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  7. Uh oh...

    I grew up on a farm, Jess. I'm afraid to read what happens next... Good six!

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  8. I like this! And I really like the use of present tense narration, which is difficult to do at times. Great six, and I hope you're over your cold.

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    1. I finally got the hang of the present tense, it gave me fits for awhile, but I think it works best for this story. It seems to showcase Grace's personality.

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  9. Oh man, you're gonna make me worry about that piglet all week? Gah! Not fair!

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  10. This could be devastating if she's identified with the piglet.

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  11. ah... please don't make this sad! Great six!

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  12. And now I have another week to worry about that little pig. Great six.

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  13. oh I'm so glad I came here. I have a special place in my heart for piglets and this was so well done. Now I have to come back and see what happens. Very well done. Great Six. :-)

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  14. Jess, you're making us all sniffle! That's a great talent for a writer to have! *nodnod* Now, I think it's time she takes that little piggy home for some hand feeding and nurturing.

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  15. It must be the runt that's in trouble. Poor piglet.

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  16. The opening line is my favorite of the six:
    "I study his face. I’m not going to like what he’s about to say."

    With a line like that, we don't need a description of his face. I appreciate a writer giving the reader credit for having an imagination. You did great!

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  17. Wow, thanks. I never thought about it that way.

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  18. Your description is terrific, Jess! More is told in what you don't say (letting us feel her reaction) than in words. Awesome six!
    p.s.~Sorry this is late!
    Ryan

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