The #PitchOn activities are underway. If you meant to enter the workshops and lost track of the date, don’t panic. You still have time. You only need two things, a completed YA manuscript that’s ready to be pitched to agents, and a 50-70 word pitch to go along with it. Information about how to enter can be found right here.
Do you want to know what you’re up against? You can check out the other pitch’s that have been entered in the workshops by visiting the host blogs.
Entering your pitch shouldn’t be your only interest, you also need to wander around to the participating blogs and leave a comment. For every comment you leave, you have a chance to receive a 10 page critique from one of these great people.
To date, I’ve gotten 1 pitch.
YA Paranormal Suspense
In the care of WitWatch—a top-secret witness protection bureau operated by supernatural agents—seventeen-year-old Alison Summers and her fire-wielding Watcher are determined to discover who murdered Ali’s grandmother and prove she’s not crazy. But, when a discharged agent with an antibody to eliminate powers learns Ali possesses the element, Water, she becomes next on his to-cure list.
I’m going to start off by saying that I like the idea behind this story. Based on the premise, it’s something I would pick up and read. However, and this is just my opinion, the pitch could still use some work. To me it’s kind of muddled, and a tiny bit confusing. My favorite part of the pitch is the final sentence, which seems to be the heart of the pitch, though I’m not sure about starting the sentence with but. I think it would be just as good if you started with when a discharged.
My big problem with this pitch is the first sentence. I think it needs to be rewritten. This is just my opinion, but I think you could drop the part about WitWatch, and launch into how Alison Summers is trying to solve the mystery of her grandmother’s murder, and add a few words about how she’s going about it, and the challenges she’s encountering, attach that to your current second sentence, and have a powerful pitch.