Sunday, June 2, 2013

My Weekly #WeWriWa #8Sunday Post 6/2/13

I'm back again with another 8 sentence snippet from my regency/Georgian era Christmas story, Snowflakes & Beeswax. It's a Christmas story, which feels a little weird now that it's officially June and finally starting to warm up a bit.

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Oliver ignored him and walked through the vapor streaming from the team of white Percherons' muzzles and moved towards the small cottage on the far side of the garden. A peach and gray colored kitten skulked out from behind a pile of firewood, saw him, and scrambled up the nearest tree trunk.
He swallowed, desperate to moisten his dry mouth as anticipation bubbled up inside of him.
He enjoyed the trips Queen Charlotte bid he make on her behalf. They provided him with a chance to escape the insanity that currently seemed to have the entire royal staff in its clutches, as well as on opportunity to escape the nerve-wracking encounters with the three young ladies who seemed to have decided he was a good marriage prospect.
Opportunities to visit this particular farm remained his favorite requests.
 “I fail to understand why anyone would choose to live this way. With his talent, Mr. Wickham would be successful in London, and he wouldn’t have to bother with cows, sheep, and pigs.”





40 comments:

  1. Ah, but we all know how wonderful it is to escape to the country. Beautifully written.

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  2. Very nice snippet - beautifully describes the escape from castle politics into the country yet raises questions about Mr. Wickham. Nicely done.

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  3. Very nice description. Looking forward to more.

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  4. I really like the details here. Being able to picture the setting always helps to me feel like I'm really there. I'm just crawling with curiosity over why the Queen sends him to that farm!

    One suggestion? This part "He enjoyed the trips Queen Charlotte bid he make on her behalf. They provided him with a chance to escape the insanity that currently seemed to have the entire royal staff in its clutches" seems to imply that the trips have been ongoing for some time, but "currently" throws me off so that I'm not sure how long Oliver has been making those trips. Could just be me though :-)

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    1. Great idea! I've been arguing with that sentence through a few revisions and couldn't quite nail it. Thanks!

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  5. Love all the escapism in this snippet.

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  6. I like the fact that he enjoys the trips but doesn't see why anyone would want to live this way. Could be a change of heart on the horizon?

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  7. Nice imagery! Beautiful and relaxing.

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  8. Lovely description today,as well as great backstory on what he's escaping (all those girls chasing him LOL)...I'm highly intrigued! Terrific snippet!

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  9. Well...farmers, you know. They get it in their blood and there's no changing them, lol! Nice scene painting, Jess. I could see that little kitten. :-)

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  10. I can smell the grass! Very nice :)

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  11. He's escaping three marriage-minded young ladies, is he? Does he have someone else in mind, or will he be encountering her soon? :)

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  12. Is the quoted remark his, or that of the circle he's escaping? And is Oliver by any chance a dog?

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    1. Oops, talk about a situation where what works in the manuscript doesn't work in snippet form. The speaker is Oliver's travel companion. And no, not a dog, sorry. I lack the talent to write from a dog's perspective, though I wish I could.

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  13. I like the sound of this place very much. The last comment must be someone else.

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    1. Yes. In the manuscript I didn't think the line needed a dialogue tag, and didn't even think about the lack of one being confusing in snippet form. Another lesson learned. The speaker is Sebastian, Oliver's travel companion.

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  14. What's wrong with cows, sheep and pigs?

    Great snippet! Very descriptive and an excellent peek into your hero's head.

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    1. Absolutely nothing :) As a rule I'd rather hang out with them instead of people. I'm glad you enjoyed my snippet.

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  15. I think he may be exchanging one sort of drama and intrigue for another. ;)
    Can't wait to see how he deals with the *quiet countryside*.

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  16. Fantastic imagery and glimpse at his dilemma at home.

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  17. I'm intrigued with his "talent". Good snippet, Jess. :)

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  18. Raises interesting questions about Mr. Wickham. Nice imagery with the vapor streaming off the muzzle's of the Percherons.

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    1. Thank you. I'm particularly proud of that part. It took a couple of tries to get it right, but the effort was worthwhile.

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  19. I want to know more about Mr. Wickham. Why would it be considered odd for him to live in the country? Why does he?

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  20. And what is the Queen's connection with Mr. Wickham?

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  21. Lovely! Your snippet makes me want to drive out to the country. :)

    ~Charley

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  22. Oh I wonder if there is something other than animals to be interested in at that farm? :) nice snippet!

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  23. At least Oliver is enjoying the trip.

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  24. Very nice descriptions, Jess! Makes me want to visit the country :)

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  25. I can understand exactly why he wants to be there.

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