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Oliver ignored him and walked through
the vapor streaming from the team of white Percherons' muzzles and moved
towards the small cottage on the far side of the garden. A peach and gray
colored kitten skulked out from behind a pile of firewood, saw him, and
scrambled up the nearest tree trunk.
He swallowed, desperate to moisten his
dry mouth as anticipation bubbled up inside of him.
He enjoyed the trips Queen Charlotte bid
he make on her behalf. They provided him with a chance to escape the insanity
that currently seemed to have the entire royal staff in its clutches, as well
as on opportunity to escape the nerve-wracking encounters with the three young
ladies who seemed to have decided he was a good marriage prospect.
Opportunities to visit this particular
farm remained his favorite requests.
“I
fail to understand why anyone would choose to live this way. With his talent,
Mr. Wickham would be successful in London, and he wouldn’t have to bother with cows,
sheep, and pigs.”
Ah, but we all know how wonderful it is to escape to the country. Beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
ReplyDeleteVery nice snippet - beautifully describes the escape from castle politics into the country yet raises questions about Mr. Wickham. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteVery nice description. Looking forward to more.
ReplyDeletevery visual and relaxing
ReplyDeleteI really like the details here. Being able to picture the setting always helps to me feel like I'm really there. I'm just crawling with curiosity over why the Queen sends him to that farm!
ReplyDeleteOne suggestion? This part "He enjoyed the trips Queen Charlotte bid he make on her behalf. They provided him with a chance to escape the insanity that currently seemed to have the entire royal staff in its clutches" seems to imply that the trips have been ongoing for some time, but "currently" throws me off so that I'm not sure how long Oliver has been making those trips. Could just be me though :-)
Great idea! I've been arguing with that sentence through a few revisions and couldn't quite nail it. Thanks!
DeleteLove all the escapism in this snippet.
ReplyDeleteI like the fact that he enjoys the trips but doesn't see why anyone would want to live this way. Could be a change of heart on the horizon?
ReplyDeleteNice imagery! Beautiful and relaxing.
ReplyDeleteLovely description today,as well as great backstory on what he's escaping (all those girls chasing him LOL)...I'm highly intrigued! Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteWell...farmers, you know. They get it in their blood and there's no changing them, lol! Nice scene painting, Jess. I could see that little kitten. :-)
ReplyDeleteTrue, very true :)
DeleteI can smell the grass! Very nice :)
ReplyDeleteHe's escaping three marriage-minded young ladies, is he? Does he have someone else in mind, or will he be encountering her soon? :)
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DeleteIs the quoted remark his, or that of the circle he's escaping? And is Oliver by any chance a dog?
ReplyDeleteOops, talk about a situation where what works in the manuscript doesn't work in snippet form. The speaker is Oliver's travel companion. And no, not a dog, sorry. I lack the talent to write from a dog's perspective, though I wish I could.
DeleteI like the sound of this place very much. The last comment must be someone else.
ReplyDeleteYes. In the manuscript I didn't think the line needed a dialogue tag, and didn't even think about the lack of one being confusing in snippet form. Another lesson learned. The speaker is Sebastian, Oliver's travel companion.
DeleteSuper details. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteWhat's wrong with cows, sheep and pigs?
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet! Very descriptive and an excellent peek into your hero's head.
Absolutely nothing :) As a rule I'd rather hang out with them instead of people. I'm glad you enjoyed my snippet.
DeleteI think he may be exchanging one sort of drama and intrigue for another. ;)
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to see how he deals with the *quiet countryside*.
Fantastic imagery and glimpse at his dilemma at home.
ReplyDeleteI'm intrigued with his "talent". Good snippet, Jess. :)
ReplyDeleteRaises interesting questions about Mr. Wickham. Nice imagery with the vapor streaming off the muzzle's of the Percherons.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I'm particularly proud of that part. It took a couple of tries to get it right, but the effort was worthwhile.
DeleteI want to know more about Mr. Wickham. Why would it be considered odd for him to live in the country? Why does he?
ReplyDeleteAnd what is the Queen's connection with Mr. Wickham?
ReplyDeleteLovely! Your snippet makes me want to drive out to the country. :)
ReplyDelete~Charley
Oh I wonder if there is something other than animals to be interested in at that farm? :) nice snippet!
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At least Oliver is enjoying the trip.
ReplyDeleteGreat descriptions!
ReplyDeleteVery nice descriptions, Jess! Makes me want to visit the country :)
ReplyDeleteI can understand exactly why he wants to be there.
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