Sunday, September 8, 2013

September 8th's Snowflake & Beeswax #WeWriWa Snippet

Welcome to another Sunday of fun reading! This post is part of the Weekend Writing Warriors and Sunday Snippet blog hop. It provides authors of all different backgrounds and genres with an opportunity to post snippets of their published and unpublished books.


I’m posting a snippet from my Georgian Christmas story, Snowflakes & Beeswax. Thanks for stopping by!

Madelyn skirted along the edge of the stone barn and rounded the corner, where a wooden room had been added to the stone barn, and slipped on the wet snow. Oliver’s hand found her elbow, steadying her. 
Heat flooded her face and she jerked out his grasp, “thank you.”  
“You need to be careful,” Oliver said, his voice low. His eyes met hers and the corners of his mouth kicked up in a warm smile.   
Madelyn swallowed and tugged her arm free and hurried to the workroom’s door. Her wet gloves made opening lifting the bar from the latch difficult, but after a moment she managed and pushed the door open. 
Snowflakes and sunlight streamed through the doorway, providing Madelyn with just enough light to see the carnage. 

21 comments:

  1. Finally starting back in the visiting rounds. I've missed your snippets! I like Madelyn's surprise in meeting Oliver this way. Just enough to catch her off-guard, but not enough to truly humiliate her.

    Anastasia Vitsky

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    1. I've been terrible about posting and visiting this summer. There just doesn't seem to have been any spare time. I'm glad you enjoyed the snippet :)

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  2. The carnage? Uh oh! Great descriptions, Jess. :-) I like how you carry on your rural writing tradition into a Georgian theme! :-)

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    1. What can I say. The idea of writing about life in the city, even a historical city, just doesn't appeal to me.

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  3. Love the steamed through snowflakes
    ~Summer
    My Blog

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  4. Terrifically descriptive piece. The carnage? AhhhhHHHh!

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  5. I enjoyed the snow, liked how he kept her from falling and then....carnage! Really an excellent excerpt, can't wait for more.

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  6. Oh, don't stop there! Great snippet. :)

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  7. Yep, nice excerpt here. It goes along sweetly, we have a gentle moment between the two, the sunlight & snowflakes add to the touching quality of the scene, then carnage!

    Do you mind an editorial comment? You do mention "stone barn" twice pretty close together, and she yanks her arm out of his grasp twice. I think you said this is an early draft so if you don't want me commenting on stuff like that, do let me know. :-)

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  8. Very enjoyable snippet, Jess. I really liked the snowflakes mixed with the sunlight. Good 8!

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  9. Very nice and the carnage comes as a shock, but could I make a suggestion? Bars to keep people or animals out would be on the inside of the door. Outside would probably be a latch of some sort. Wet gloves would still make a latch difficult, but you have two verbs like one was meant to be removed. By the way "carnage" means "the killing of a large number of people." Is that really what you mean, or just a total mess?

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  10. The carnage was a wake up. The previous scene lulled me into picturing a nice snowy scene. Very intriguing.

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  11. Hey! That was not nice. You left me with "carnage" and no idea what that means. LOL. Great teaser.

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  12. Wow...from white snow to carnage...that's quite a journey in 8 sentences! Can't wait to see more.

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  13. Yup, you're just a tease...enjoyed the eight!

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  14. Carnage? Oh my, what does she see? Amazing how just one word well placed can add so much suspense. Well done, Jess!

    History Sleuth's Milk Carton Murders

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