Sunday, October 13, 2013

Snowflakes & Beeswax #WeWriWa snippet 10/13/13

Hi all! Welcome to another Sunday of great writing snippet!

This week I skimmed through my Georgian era romance novella and jumped a few chapters ahead for my snippet. It's the snippet where the MC, Oliver, realizes he shouldn't have left and returns to the little Northern England farm.

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Snowflakes caught on the bay’s short mane creating a delicate, lacelike net on the dark hair as Oliver halted next to the Hawthorne tree and dismounted. 
He glanced at the sky, measuring the position of the sun’s glow in the otherwise gray sky. Mid-afternoon. He still had a few hours before the sun set.  
Perfect timing. 
He’d stay for a few moments, maybe have a cup of tea, and ensure himself all was well at the little farm before finding a room at the inn.   
He’d worry about explaining his appearance at her door when the she asked; right now he needed to make sure she was safe. He hoped seeing her would ease the gnawing ache which had been growing gradually stronger with each step his mount took away from the Wickham farm.

21 comments:

  1. Very nicely done 8. Lovely description and nicely showing Oliver's "need" to se her again. Good job.

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  2. Hmmm...I wonder what the chances are that he actually spends the night at an inn?

    Kudos!

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  3. You paint such a beautiful scene here - very evocative and sweet. Well done.

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  4. Hi Jess :) Nitpicky me again :) If it's cold enough to snow and it's mid-afternoon, sunset is probably not very far off. You probably would have caught that but my inner editor insisted I mention it :)

    I agree with Karen, definitely evocative. I love that he >noticed< his feeling that something wasn't right, and that he acted on it. I really like that guy!

    Hey are you doing NaNo this year? I'm going to jump in for the first time :D

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  5. What beautiful prose! Fantastic description and language, Jess, I love this!

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  6. Beautiful job! I love the language here, it's just lovely to read and makes me want to read more.

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  7. Oliver is so adorable with his plans for a casual cup of tea! Very sweet eight. :)

    (I completely forgot to sign up for WeWriWa, but my post is up, anyway, if you have the time)

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  8. What a lovely, pastoral scene. Beautifully written!

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  9. Lovely descriptions, and nice evocation of his feelings.

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  10. Oh good, I love this story and I'm so glad he's feeling protective of her! Excellent excerpt!

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  11. Lovely excerpt, I loved the last line!

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  12. Very poignant. His thoughts really showed his emotions.

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  13. Sounds like he's got it bad for her. Good snippet, Jess. :)

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  14. Beautiful word picture you've painted here. I want her to know he was there! Great 8 :)

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  15. It's nice to see that he is acting on his feelings.

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  16. Ha Jess, you're just like me. Still hopping around the list mid week. :) Great scene. You always do a good job with the setting. I sometimes have problems with scenery. Weird huh?

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