Sunday, August 26, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday:Fools and Runts 16

I'll confess. This is favorite six sentence snippet that I've posted, and one of the few times I've tried writing comedy and felt that it worked the way I wanted it to. Grace spent the last two Sunday's falling, this Sunday she discovers why. Also, in a clip that I haven't posted, she and Luke discuss her attire which isn't exactly appropriate for farm use.

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“My skirt, that doesn’t make any sense, I never trip over my ...” the words run dry in my throat as I glance at my legs.
My tennis shoes, considerably dirtier then they had been when I left the house are still on my feet, but the only thing that stretched between them and my low-ride, lime green bikini panties is a lot of pale bare skin. Too dismayed to register any embarrassment just yet, I glance up at Luke who looks about ready to explode with laughter.
            He points to the pigs who grunt and squeal as the use my skirt to play a lively game of tug-of-war. “The piglet you befriended was chewing on the bottom, and when you took a step it kind of snagged around your ankles, tripping you. As you fell, she spooked and ran, but didn’t let go and the skirt just kind of slipped off.”

I should  probably mention that Grace favors long peasant skirts with an elastic waist. 


44 comments:

  1. I love all the clothing references in this snippet. I can really picture what is going on.

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  2. I bursted into laughter! :) I think you did a great job with the comedic aspect of this moment. For me, the punch line is the third sentence, after the setup and Grace's realization. Luke's explanation adds to the level of humilation and gives a good visual. Full circle! Mean and wonderful and really really funny, Jess!

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  3. Oh, poor girl! I hope Luke holds his laughter in and helps her. Nice six! :)

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  4. You are so right: what a comical scene! Great six, and thanks for the laugh!!

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  5. Lol! Great visual, Jess! lol... The dirty tennis shoes--leading into the bare skin and "lime green panties" took the reader straight from a very normal thought to quite the unexpected. Well done! :-)

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  6. Oh no! That's terrible! She needs to get cleaned up. Maybe he could help her with that?

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  7. Could just picture this happening! Great six!

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  8. Whoops! Too funny! Poor Grace

    You do have some typos in this snippet that I thought I should let you know about: "dirty *than when" "squeal as *they use" "The piglet *you"

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    1. Oops! Thanks for pointing those out Angela.

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  9. Oh my...how mortifying. Great 6!

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  10. Damn pigs, they'll eat anything! Cute snippet!

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    1. That's the truth. Goats are even worse!

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  11. Oh, the pigs are always to blame. Very cute six, Jess!

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  12. This Six makes me smile. Great stuff, Jess!

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  13. Oh, man, poor Grace. Or not.... Luke's chance at chivalry has arrived!

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  14. Holy crap, this was pretty funny! I can just picture that piglet chewing on the skirt, and Grace not noticing, and the whole domino effect!

    Reminds me of the (way less embarrassing) time my class went on a trip to the zoo. The teacher said to make absolutely sure we did not lose our paper nametags and presto, right on cue, a goat reached over my shoulder and ate mine. :D I love animals. I've had as many as five pet rabbits at a time.

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    1. Goats really do eat everything, and there's not much you can do to stop them.

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  15. Sounds like she'd better go shopping for some blue jeans!

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  16. In all my years of raising pigs I never had THAT happen to me. Poor Grace!

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    1. I was never in the exact same position as Grace, but my top did fall off during one particularly memorable horse show.

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  17. LMBO...too funny..she might not be able to laugh now, but she will in the future! I feel for her. Definitely now skirts while working the farm!

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    1. LOL! It was actually discussed during at least one of the farm safety lectures I sat through during high school ag class.

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  18. You sure have a way of describing a scene. I can picture it quite vividly. You do humor well. I couldn't help but grin.

    Wonderful Six, Jess.

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  19. OMG! Tooo funny! I can personally attest to young animals' aptitude for stealing the clothing of unwary humans, LOL. Wonderful Six!'
    Kenra

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  20. Gotta love those piglets! Great six, Jess! You have a very natural flow.

    Ryan Derham

    p.s. Sorry this is late!

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  21. Buahahaaahahaaa! Oh, um, *looks around.* That poor girl! ;c)

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