I'll confess. This is favorite six sentence snippet that I've posted, and one of the few times I've tried writing comedy and felt that it worked the way I wanted it to. Grace spent the last two Sunday's falling, this Sunday she discovers why. Also, in a clip that I haven't posted, she and Luke discuss her attire which isn't exactly appropriate for farm use.
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“My skirt, that doesn’t make any
sense, I never trip over my ...” the words run dry in my throat as I glance at
my legs.
My tennis shoes, considerably
dirtier then they had been when I left the house are still on my feet, but the only thing
that stretched between them and my low-ride, lime green bikini panties is a lot
of pale bare skin. Too dismayed to register any embarrassment just yet, I
glance up at Luke who looks about ready to explode with laughter.
He
points to the pigs who grunt and squeal as the use my skirt to play a lively
game of tug-of-war. “The piglet you befriended was chewing on the bottom, and
when you took a step it kind of snagged around your ankles, tripping you. As
you fell, she spooked and ran, but didn’t let go and the skirt just kind of
slipped off.”
I should probably mention that Grace favors long peasant skirts with an elastic waist.
I like the look of this story.
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
DeleteI love all the clothing references in this snippet. I can really picture what is going on.
ReplyDeleteI bursted into laughter! :) I think you did a great job with the comedic aspect of this moment. For me, the punch line is the third sentence, after the setup and Grace's realization. Luke's explanation adds to the level of humilation and gives a good visual. Full circle! Mean and wonderful and really really funny, Jess!
ReplyDeleteOh, poor girl! I hope Luke holds his laughter in and helps her. Nice six! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Jessica!
DeleteYou are so right: what a comical scene! Great six, and thanks for the laugh!!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your support :)
DeleteLol! Great visual, Jess! lol... The dirty tennis shoes--leading into the bare skin and "lime green panties" took the reader straight from a very normal thought to quite the unexpected. Well done! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Teresa
DeleteOh no! That's terrible! She needs to get cleaned up. Maybe he could help her with that?
ReplyDeleteCould just picture this happening! Great six!
ReplyDeleteFantastic!
DeleteWhoops! Too funny! Poor Grace
ReplyDeleteYou do have some typos in this snippet that I thought I should let you know about: "dirty *than when" "squeal as *they use" "The piglet *you"
Oops! Thanks for pointing those out Angela.
DeleteOh my...how mortifying. Great 6!
ReplyDeleteDamn pigs, they'll eat anything! Cute snippet!
ReplyDeleteThat's the truth. Goats are even worse!
DeleteOh, the pigs are always to blame. Very cute six, Jess!
ReplyDeleteTrue. Thank you!
DeleteThis Six makes me smile. Great stuff, Jess!
ReplyDeleteOh, man, poor Grace. Or not.... Luke's chance at chivalry has arrived!
ReplyDeleteShe has had a rough day, hasn't she.
Deletelol thanks for the laugh!
ReplyDeleteAnytime:)
DeleteHoly crap, this was pretty funny! I can just picture that piglet chewing on the skirt, and Grace not noticing, and the whole domino effect!
ReplyDeleteReminds me of the (way less embarrassing) time my class went on a trip to the zoo. The teacher said to make absolutely sure we did not lose our paper nametags and presto, right on cue, a goat reached over my shoulder and ate mine. :D I love animals. I've had as many as five pet rabbits at a time.
Goats really do eat everything, and there's not much you can do to stop them.
DeleteSounds like she'd better go shopping for some blue jeans!
ReplyDeleteIn all my years of raising pigs I never had THAT happen to me. Poor Grace!
ReplyDeleteI was never in the exact same position as Grace, but my top did fall off during one particularly memorable horse show.
DeleteLMBO...too funny..she might not be able to laugh now, but she will in the future! I feel for her. Definitely now skirts while working the farm!
ReplyDeleteLOL! It was actually discussed during at least one of the farm safety lectures I sat through during high school ag class.
DeleteYou sure have a way of describing a scene. I can picture it quite vividly. You do humor well. I couldn't help but grin.
ReplyDeleteWonderful Six, Jess.
OMG! Tooo funny! I can personally attest to young animals' aptitude for stealing the clothing of unwary humans, LOL. Wonderful Six!'
ReplyDeleteKenra
Gotta love those piglets! Great six, Jess! You have a very natural flow.
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p.s. Sorry this is late!
Buahahaaahahaaa! Oh, um, *looks around.* That poor girl! ;c)
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