Oliver laughed. Although his shabby
appearance and heavy drinking had caused several people to question the Queen’s
wisdom, nothing shook her faith in Billy. He was the best freight driver in
England. No matter how bad a situation became, Billy kept a level head.
Queen Charlotte refused to trust anyone
but the very best with today’s task.
Sebastian secured his own horse and brushed
past Oliver.
“Preparing for the Christmas celebration
takes all of my time,” Sebastian grumbled as he studied` their surroundings. “I’ve
explained this to the Queen, yet she sends me here year after year. Why? ”
Nice snippet. I have a bit of background here about the characters and their personalities. I'm intrigued to know why Sebastian is sent there year after year.
ReplyDeleteBilly sounds like a good man and appearances are always deceiving. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Debbie!
DeletePoor Sebastian, he seems to hate the place and she keeps sending him there.
ReplyDeleteOooo so what's this about? You've got a nice aura of mystery here even without a spooky setting. Lovely job on this one, Jess.
ReplyDeleteI am definitely intrigued by your snippet. You have introduced an interesting triangle which should drama to the situation.
ReplyDeleteOne point which I hope you'll find useful: "Sebastian grumbled as he studied` their surroundings." - this sentence has an unnecessary apostrophe.
Oh! Thanks for pointing that out!
DeleteVery curious. I want to read on and find out why.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad it's caught your attention. I'm kind of proud of this fluffy little story.
DeleteWhere does she send him every year? I would like to know why as well. Interesting eight!
ReplyDeleteThe Queen probably knows what she's doing in sending him for that task every year.
ReplyDeleteI'm with Sebastian---Why? I guess I will have to come back next time to find out more.
ReplyDeleteI see a lot of possibilities here. Nice 8.
ReplyDeleteIf the Queen only uses the best for this task, Sebastian should be flattered, not grumbling! Nice character note. Great 8.
ReplyDeleteYear after year...why? Hmmm... That answer has to be good. ;-) Great 8, Jess! :-)
ReplyDeleteIntrigued with everyone else and can't wait for the revelation of "why" - excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteI like Billy there.
ReplyDeleteWell obviously she sends Sebastian year after year for the same reason she chose Billy: she will only trust the best with this task.
ReplyDeleteGreat eight, Jess!
Definitely leaves me curious for more! Great 8! :D
ReplyDeleteGreat characters. Where are they?
ReplyDeleteThe queen and Billy have a trusted relationship. Sebastian should find a way of learning from the situation.
ReplyDeleteI'm guessing he's good at his job! Loved it, fast and telling!
ReplyDeleteYou got to go with who you trust right? I like that you made the person she trusts a bit unconventional.
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